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05.04.29

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May 25, 2005
05.04.29 by ~Synalle

From the first time reading to the twenty-first, it strikes me with every review; the depth of emotion, the symbolism, the careful wording, the stark honesty of expression that makes art.
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Literature Text

If I told you
    I don’t

                          you—anymore — Maybe
              I never did
I wonder if you would survey
me with those
                             saddest
                             sweetest
                              yet have I been unpromising:
                             your eyes.
                              once offered had I but

                              with
                               time
                                withdrew
                             it, as if un-
               never-
                             spoken.
"it doesn't have one yet"
Some of you have seen this before. Don't want to kill the other one, but I was asked to move it, so here it is.

EDIT
I think I'm going to have a heart attack. *stares*
Um, yeah... while I still have some semblance of sense--that's the date of composition: 2005 April 29.
Thanks ever so much, DC & ndifference! *keels over*
(and everyone else +fav-ing and leaving such nice comments!)

Another Edit
In light of the confusion/lack of comprehension a lot of people seem to be experiencing, I can only point you towards my explanation on the first page towards the bottom. Please keep in mind that this is not a fixed definition of the poem, only the intent I had in mind as I wrote it. If you prefer more structured poetry, I've written all types, and this was but an experiment in spacing-dependent free verse. And yes, the spacing is significant and has meaning, or was intended to; it's not just there to disguise the fact that I'm not saying anything.
© 2005 - 2024 Synalle
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hey um i kinda get it but i'm so lost