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but then again by ~Synalle:iconSynalle:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




     fractured Soul of Emptiness
—what’s not there can’t be broken
and I cannot remember—
         (not for the life of me
, what life remains although
…although)
         its sole Sincerity
       entrusts me to its last.
   the Rest none can forget, could any remember
   undercurrent
undermining understated, but not understood: not never
   but so insincere      and bruised
         that I cannot remember



15.03.2005
©2005-2009 ~Synalle
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Author's Comments

Another one for the Human Nature gallery. Funny how that happens. Ah, well...

One of my most recent streaks of free verse using spacing as a significant part of the poetry, not just the words. And, me being myself, and therefore very fond of punctuation, I started experimenting with punctuation to heighten effect. This was scribbled in about five minutes while waiting in my academic advisor's office upside down in my agenda--it came out surprisingly well, I think. Title came almost instantly, certainly without trying.

Written: 15 March 2005

Edit: [link] and [link] . Particularly for Ariod, since it was Ariod's request that sparked this, but have fun anyway.

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~Ariod400 Mar 31, 2005, 11:37:34 PM
I like it, but I wish that I could hear it, because even with the helpful spacing, I still mess the timing up ><. What inspired it? Anything I should be concerned about? Or just random musings... Good work, at least I think so, but as you have said, I am prejudice. I will sleep on it, and if anything brongs me, I will be shure to try and tear it apart then. Goodnight.

--
"For everything there is a season." ~ Ecc. 3:1
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~DeirdraChaeli Apr 1, 2005, 8:17:15 AM
I love this, but you knew that. It confuses me, but you knew that as well. Beautiful work, dear.
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~ArianPeregrine Apr 7, 2005, 7:22:43 AM
Love it! love it love it love it! the spacing really makes it... cool. I wish I could leave better reviews, but my thesaurus is permanently broken... I also ditto Deirdra's remarks.

--
Be Thou my Wisdom, and Thou my true Word;
I ever with Thee and Thou with me, Lord;
Thou my great Father, I Thy true son;
Thou in me dwelling, and I with Thee one.

In order to be great, you must overcome yourself.
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~Synalle Apr 10, 2005, 1:15:16 PM
Sometimes the spacing is helpful. Other times it really isn't--not with the timing, anyway. I'm not sure what the timing is, even, because I didn't write it to be read aloud. I don't know what inspired it; a few people remarked that it was an exact reflection of their mental states, which I take to be a bad thing, as none of them could explain it to me either.
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~Synalle Apr 10, 2005, 1:17:58 PM
Thanks, and I'm more confused than you are.
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~Synalle Apr 10, 2005, 1:25:38 PM
then I shall ditto-refer you to my response to hers.

Thanks, btw. I understand broken thesauruses as well, so that's ok.
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~Ariod400 Apr 10, 2005, 1:59:40 PM
*Laughs* I will work on an explanation if you would like...

--
"For everything there is a season." ~ Ecc. 3:1
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~Synalle Apr 11, 2005, 10:10:37 PM
Please do. I'll be fascinated to see what you come up with.
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